You might wanna try using a thinner gauge metal. 18 gauge might work out a bit better, 20 is to thin and 16 seems a bit thick. Since it's thinner you wont have to work as hard to get the details in it that you want. If it becomes work hardened then its not going to have much, if any give to it in terms of flex.
But I don't know how much you have worked with steel before either.
Another option might be to do a wax or use Sulpher Free clay to do the visor in. Both can be smoothed out by using heat or with the clay since its oil based you can brush on some mineral spirits (can't remember if its mineral spirits or paint thinner) to smooth the surface out.
Either way, the last thing I can suggest is prolly the easiest. Flat black spay paint. Do about 30 or so light coats on what you want to cast then give it a light sand with some high grit sand paper if need be on any imperfections that still exist. The paint will fill in the gaps and tiny holes really well and it will help to smooth out the surface.