405th Role Play 2 Crit

[SGT Razor]

Hehe... "friendly."

You know I'm writing. Same characters, too... minus one and plus another one.

 

[leegrisham]

Don't be bashful folks - Post away!
http://405th.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=13388

There I did it I added my first post.... I wanted to wait for a few folks to go first but I wanted to break the ice so I did.

 

[Assassin716]

really sry bout that guys had some difficulty with GFs internet as i was ready to post it, just got back and noticed you guys started it.


i noticed the start off so im going to change my first post up a bit when i have time

 

[odst26]

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Name: Reece "Scorch" Harrison
Gender: Male
Species: Human
Homeworld: Earth
Faction: UNSC, ODST
Skills: Heavy Weapons, Demolitions, Computers
Rank: Sgt.
With: 121st ODST

Name: Athena MacMillius
Gender: Female
Species: Human
Homeworld: Earth
Faction: UNSC, Navy
Skills: Computers, Small arms
Rank: Petty Officer Third Class
With: Spartan ship UNSC Destroyer Fire At Will

History: Reece and Athena both met under a Hostage situation involving the Rebellion, Reece was only 12, Athena 10. The Rebels decided to convince the police that they were serious and forced Reece to shoot Athena. Trying not to kill her Reece shot her in the side, trying to convince the Rebels to leave him and her alone and deal with Adults other then little kids. The Rebels were eventually disarmed and taken by force, all the Hostages were taken to Hospitals across New Petersburg, by fate Athena and Reece were in the very same hospital, the very same room. While sleeping Athena stabbed Reece in the side with a Scalpel, simply stating "There, were even" and going back to bed. The next morning Reece introduced himself, Athena did the same. It was only after going back to school that Reece realized that him and Athena went to the same school. Both became great friends.

It was only when Reece turned 18 that they were finally separated from each other as Reece was enlisted into the Marines. To both their surprise he held potential and became a Corporal with the 121st of the ODST. 3 years later Athena joined the Navy, as she was not fit for the Marines. Slightly angry Reece urged Athena to finish a 2 year course and leave the Navy, Athena refused until Reece himself left the ODST, which was not an easy task. Reece, convinced Athena knew what she was doing, left her to her own business and continued his run in the ODST. With a recent promotion to Sargent, Reece finally proposed and was engaged to Athena, and vowed to marry her after 1 more year as a ODST.

your with me

Loved the first rp and definately wanted to be a part of this one:

Name: Sam "Essex" Ryan
Rank : Lance Corporal
Age :19

BIO: Born i essex in the uk Ryan joined the UNSC marine corps at the age of 16 in order to escape the petty crime and casual violence that were common where he grew up.
On his first mission he and his platoon we sent to an outpost on the edge of unsc space that had droped out of contact.
Upon arrival the outpost seemed deserted untill six hours into the mission it was discovered that the outpost had been attacked and over run by a hordeof brutes who then proceeded to hunt the rescue team for sport. Ryan survived for 48 hours and was the only one to make it back to the pick up zone alive when lost coms procedure was enacted and a pelican came to see what was wrong.
For surviving the incident Ryan was promoted to private first class and offered transfer to anywhere within the usnc. He volunteered for the ODSTs sniper corps and was posted to the 91st airbourne division with who he served at the battles of reach and earth where he served with destiction and promoted to his current rank. The 91st airbourne is currently attached to the unsc battle group commanded by the flagship Indianapolis.

(when the carriers have been named ill post ryan to one of them)

can you be apart of my team, then our squad will be complete

 

[damasterchief]

Name: jake (nickname frost will explain later)
Gender: male
Species:human
appearance: crisp blue eyes short messy white hair stained with blood
Homeworld: reach
Faction: unsc spartan
Skills: hell jumping, anger fueled adrenaline rush
Rank: Senior Chief Petty Officer Spartan II jake-118
History: jake was a kid like most other Spartans when he was abducted, he actually liked being taken away he hated both his parents but he loved reach and when news of it being destroyed reached him he was fueled with anger. jake wanted to kill all of the covenaunt. he never trusted the elites when they switched sides he expecially hated the arbiter. and now when in every fight againt the covenaunt he gets a anger filled adreneline rush and after he remains victorious he takes the blue covenount blood and he spikes his hair with it. and thats why his friends call him frost.
bio: jake has a dark history not alot is known abought him besides he just plain hates the covenaunt
jake likes to bring his br-55 battle rifle with him into battle with his M6G MAGNUM as his sidearm he pretty much despises using covenaunt weapons unless he absolutely has to.

 

[church 957]

Thanks for the offer spartan 26 but i want to keep Ryan on his own for a while but im more than happy to link up with your guys later in the story, after what ive got planed for him he could probably use the support.

 

[Assassin716]

okay to clear some things up,

1. if your doing a post in the role play make sure you have at least, AT LEAST ONE PARAGRAPH

2. Do not post anything not related to the story, such as crit or anything about someones post, all that goes here.
and if some of you have forgotten, you have power over your own posts, you can delete them yourself, so if you crit. or said something not related to the story please delete it, or if you feel someone else has done so...pm them about it

3. Do not assume your character has immediate knowledge of someones character,
example some characters have the knowledge that Vice Admiral Jamius Valstaff is an ONI Operative, but i believe only characters from the previous role play (that was at the debriefing) know that and are not allowed to relay that information to any other character-due to classification-so reminder, even though you might know as a reader, your characters dont know, so please fix information regarding Valstaff



just a little something to remind people



update edit: Its also a little hard to contribute to the story if your character is always paired up with someone elses, because the two characters are acting together we essentially already know whats going on, which is why its better if character keep their distances, and that way we dont always have to wait for our partners post to continue. And we will eventually be getting a larger view of the story if something different is goin on with each character

 

[Spartan137]

update edit: Its also a little hard to contribute to the story if your character is always paired up with someone elses, because the two characters are acting together we essentially already know whats going on, which is why its better if character keep their distances, and that way we dont always have to wait for our partners post to continue. And we will eventually be getting a larger view of the story if something different is goin on with each character

Yes.

FYI, me and Adulese are in a mutual agreement where we can control each others character's to a degree. During the mission, I plan to seperate out for a more seemless RP experience.

Man, that last post of mine was huge. Adulese, write in your perspective of the battle and what you and Charlie go do.

 

[Adulese]

Amazing post Spartan 137. I'll get mine up in the morning. I plan to include not only my side of the SIM, but what has been going on with the SMITE Battle Group since 074's departure. Should be a rather long one.

- Adulese

 

[RaptorGamma]

Name: Pete "DOC" Kokes
Gender: Male
Species: Human
Homeworld: Earth
Faction: UNSC
Skills: Medical, TAC-ASSIST
Rank: CLASSIFIED
With: last member of the 8th infantry "Reach"

History: Doc, though only 20 years of age , has the looks of a man of 50, he has seen somany of his friends and allies, fall to the covanent on reach, and at new mombasa. two years ago when he signed up at his local garrason, he though that he was invincible, the best that the UNSC could provide, gonna see the universe, help its inhabidents and be a hero. The true heros were the ones that did everything that they could do and suffered for it, the screams of men and women calling for a corpsman, Pete himself. He almost didnt make it off that foresaken planet of Reach, but he made it home to Earth, only to have it invaded by the covenant. Doc fights for the memories of his friends on Reach and Earth, they are all that he has left.

Equipment: Standard Issue MA5C rifle, M6D Pistol and UNSC approved Medical Kit

 

[Assassin716]

just to add there really is no such thing as a classified rank, even if they are oni, they still have a basic or enlisted rank

 

[Keegan]

Ok, I thought I could do this, but I just dont have time.
IF someoen could take the space of Chaos's AI Id appreciate it. I have to many other things on mind.

 

[odst26]

update edit: Its also a little hard to contribute to the story if your character is always paired up with someone elses, because the two characters are acting together we essentially already know whats going on, which is why its better if character keep their distances, and that way we dont always have to wait for our partners post to continue. And we will eventually be getting a larger view of the story if something different is goin on with each character

thats what i was thinking, my squad has full controll over my chararcter if im not around

 

[Adulese]

Spartan 137 and I are doing pretty well I think. We are posting just about every day and progressing rather nicely. I just posted up my contribution to the SIM. Expect another post tomorrow on the SMITE Battle Group and what they have been up to since 074's departure.

- Adulese

 

[odst26]

Spartan 137 and I are doing pretty well I think. We are posting just about every day and progressing rather nicely. I just posted up my contribution to the SIM. Expect another post tomorrow on the SMITE Battle Group and what they have been up to since 074's departure.

- Adulese

keep up the good work

 

[leegrisham]

I think it is impossible to write an RP independent of other characters. Otherwise we are just writing a book. Especially since we only have NPC antagonists. (Which presents a challenge on its own.)

Sorry for the long post in there - I hope you can bear to read through it all - there are two important aspects - the first time we see the new strength of the Covenant and the first appearance of the SPARTAN gunships

 

[helios]

The trick (and therefore the hardest part) is getting a good ablance between inter-PC interaction and exposition. No-one wants to read one line about how Karl walked up to Jane and said hi. that being to total content of the post. on the other end of the spectrum, no-one likes having to read three thousand words of what your character is doing, thinking, eating and why, if there's no character interaction.

 

[Spartan137]

Whew... another massive post.

Adulese, please fill in the time between my last two posts with what you and Charlie did, then you can run your own independet SIM, which'll be a good experiance for you.

Looks like my SIM isn't calibrated the same as Leeg's .

 

[Adulese]

Alright, will do 137. Oh and for those who may be wondering what is going on with the SMITE battle group. Don't worry, they will come into play very soon.

- Adulese

 

[Assassin716]

as i said before in the previous review topic, dont give away what you have planned or when you plan to post it, it takes away from the enjoyment