405th Rp Critique

[leegrisham]

"A perimeter around the survivors create."
-Yoda Attack of the Clones
Went ahead and did another post, I didn't want my story getting hole - E

 

[BlacRoseImmortal]

My last post is a painful one. It was the only way I could hint a sequel in an ominous way. BRI should feel loved, though. Hope you guys enjoy it.

LMAO I couldnt stop laughin when I read "shes into snakes and stuff" hahahahahahaha, awesome

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[SGT Razor]

lee, where did those Humans come from? That's definately not Bravo. Have you been reading my posts?

<div class='quotetop'>QUOTE(BlacRoseImmortal @ Jun 24 2008, 08:41 AM) <{POST_SNAPBACK}></div><div class='quotemain'>LMAO I couldnt stop laughin when I read "shes into snakes and stuff" hahahahahahaha, awesome

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And notice, you're going to marry the sniper. I love how things fall into place like that.

 

[leegrisham]

I thought you send a team to me.
I must have misconstrued/misinterpreted this post.

"Let's move, Bravos." Razor motioned towards the hallway. They moved into the next room, almost identical to the previous one, only this one had living Elites, some laying against the wall, wounded. Others standing. "Glad to see you've started the party without us."

I thought those guys met with my elites, so I took them with me... (apologies for god moding but... kindasortahad to)

Either way there are some humans here now lol.

 

[BlacRoseImmortal]

lol the story is so awesome right now. and hell yeah I'm marrying a sniper! WOOT!

 

[SGT Razor]

I thought you send a team to me.
I must have misconstrued/misinterpreted this post.
I thought those guys met with my elites, so I took them with me... (apologies for god moding but... kindasortahad to)

Either way there are some humans here now lol.

My team stayed inside the building when Eerie died. They have no idea, all they know is that there was an explosion on the surface. They met up with the Elites to get the rock, and they had to rescue the hostages. I'm sorry that wasn't clear enough for you, but could you edit your last post so that it makes sense to the readers?

 

[leegrisham]

Ok, just so I'm clear - you have some mineral, and there are no humans with me

 

[SGT Razor]

That's right. You gave me a sample, and we went in the other direction.

 

[leegrisham]

Done, sorry for confusionment.

 

[SGT Razor]

Awesome. Thanks.

 

[Assassin716]

add first part to my escape, make sure everything is in order guys

 

[leegrisham]

Ended my story arc. There was nothing left for me to do here at Makos so I wanted to go ahead and clear myself from the story queue so no one is waiting on me to post before they make a post. Excited to see the ending of you's guys story.

 

[BlacRoseImmortal]

You did a great job buddy! I hope you take part in the next RP. Your work on thi sone was magnificent and my helmet is off to you *salutes*

Yay Lee!

 

[leegrisham]

LoL thanks a lot. Nice to hear your appreciation. Are you going to join in on the next story?

 

[BlacRoseImmortal]

I wanted to be in this one and all the upcoming ones but... I have absolutely no writing skills and no creative mind lol. I'll leave the RP to the professionals, plus I just love reading and cheering from the sidelines :]

 

[UNSC Leatherneck]

I'd love to try and get in on the next RP. I'll be wrapping up the ODST:To Hell and Back story here in a week or so, so I'll have creative energy to spare. I'd like to see a discussion on some story and plot elements first, that way everyone will be on the same page. Lemme know.

 

[leegrisham]

I'd love to try and get in on the next RP. I'll be wrapping up the ODST:To Hell and Back story here in a week or so, so I'll have creative energy to spare. I'd like to see a discussion on some story and plot elements first, that way everyone will be on the same page. Lemme know.

Details like this including rules and guidlines will be posted on the opening post of the next story. PM me if your interested and I can give you a sneak peak.

 

[Assassin716]

Yes a new RP will be happening in a few weeks. We will be pounding out the basic questions such as

Who, What, When, Why, How, and Where?

We (the writers of the current RP) have been going in a new direction and rest assured anyone and everyone will be able to participate. And with basic guidelines and the above questions answered, we will be able to make sure we are all on the same page.

with that said ill be posting an update to the current story later today

 

[leegrisham]

HE HE HE I just wrote up my first draft for my first post on the next story, it is such an awesome one I am very excited.

 

[SGT Razor]

You gonna start out with Eerie's memorial? Just my opinion, but I think that would be a great place to start out for the sequel.